Monday, September 28, 2009

Fly on the Wall

It's been a while since I've had time to write something creative...I'm sad that I had a struggle for a while...hehe...


Silence hung in the air of the dim hallway of the BBC building. There was the occasional clatter of the opening and closing doors of the restrooms. Among the people that were littered here and there along the corridor walls, no one said a word, only keeping to themselves.

A figure emerged from the bright opening of the building’s entrance. Eyes followed the girl who was walking down the hallway clutching a book in one arm. Her other arm supported the cell phone to her ear. Her quiet voice amplified down the hallway, bouncing of the walls and suspended in the air for a while.

"My Japanese class changed classrooms..." "I think it's this one..."

She stopped in front classroom 103 and peered through the window. She then glanced left and right down the hallway hoping to see someone from her class.

"I guess I'll talk to you later" She uttered into her phone as she lowered herself into a sitting position next to the door. After putting away her phone, she opened her text book and read.
Minutes passed and more people trickled by, she glanced at every passing person as if she was waiting for someone. By now a few people stationed themselves inches away from her, obviously waiting for the same class. She once again glanced left and right and noticed the familiar faces, confirming that she was in the right place. She then went back to her book.

Three girls walked by and stopped in front of the 103 door. They too peered through the window like she did before and then glanced down at her.

"Are you waiting for this class?" One of the three girls asked her.

"Japanese?" She replied.

"No...this is supposed to be our English class"

"But my teacher emailed us saying that we've moved to room 103"

"But we've been using this classroom for a while"

"I dunno...My teacher said we'd be changing rooms because the other one is too small for our class"

"Well then...let's see when our teachers get here"

So there her conversation with the three girls ended. She went back to her text book, and the three, who were now standing around as if to circle her were having their own conversation. They talked back and forth loudly about class assignments, totally unaware that the girl was trying to study. She had no room to move out of their way, nor did they have the decency of moving some place else to leave her alone.

Finally when it was safe enough to enter the classroom, the three girls quickly pushed their way through the classroom door to claim their seats as if trying to beat the girl to it.

1 comment:

  1. A nice vignette, with lots of interesting detail and dialogue. But you need to work on quote attribution and punctuation. 18/20

    Ex.: "My Japanese class changed classrooms," she said. "I think it's this one...."

    She stopped in front classroom 103 and peered through the window. She then glanced left and right down the hallway hoping to see someone from her class.

    "I guess I'll talk to you later," she said into her phone as she lowered herself....

    ... "Are you waiting for this class?" one of the three girls asked her.

    "Japanese?" she replied.

    "No...this is supposed to be our English class."

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