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Last week I got the chance to go to San Francisco State because my friend had to pick up some documents. So she left me alone to roam around the Science department building. I found this flyer on the Anthropology Department's bulletin board.

In the second line the comma after students should be removed, and a period should be added. Also the comma after there should be deleted as well.


My manager at work made me do some skill building exercises. This is one of the handouts she gave me. This handout is distributed to all the Payless Shoes Sources in the nation.



For line number five, today is spelled wrong.


This is a handout of guidelines for oral presentations in my Japanese class.



For the first sentence of this page many items needed to be inserted and some deleted to make it flow more smoothly. It should read "First, find your partner who you will work with. Basically, there has to be two members, but if the class is odd in the number of students, you can chose to perform the oral quiz in a group of three."

Fly on the Wall

It's been a while since I've had time to write something creative...I'm sad that I had a struggle for a while...hehe...


Silence hung in the air of the dim hallway of the BBC building. There was the occasional clatter of the opening and closing doors of the restrooms. Among the people that were littered here and there along the corridor walls, no one said a word, only keeping to themselves.

A figure emerged from the bright opening of the building’s entrance. Eyes followed the girl who was walking down the hallway clutching a book in one arm. Her other arm supported the cell phone to her ear. Her quiet voice amplified down the hallway, bouncing of the walls and suspended in the air for a while.

"My Japanese class changed classrooms..." "I think it's this one..."

She stopped in front classroom 103 and peered through the window. She then glanced left and right down the hallway hoping to see someone from her class.

"I guess I'll talk to you later" She uttered into her phone as she lowered herself into a sitting position next to the door. After putting away her phone, she opened her text book and read.
Minutes passed and more people trickled by, she glanced at every passing person as if she was waiting for someone. By now a few people stationed themselves inches away from her, obviously waiting for the same class. She once again glanced left and right and noticed the familiar faces, confirming that she was in the right place. She then went back to her book.

Three girls walked by and stopped in front of the 103 door. They too peered through the window like she did before and then glanced down at her.

"Are you waiting for this class?" One of the three girls asked her.

"Japanese?" She replied.

"No...this is supposed to be our English class"

"But my teacher emailed us saying that we've moved to room 103"

"But we've been using this classroom for a while"

"I dunno...My teacher said we'd be changing rooms because the other one is too small for our class"

"Well then...let's see when our teachers get here"

So there her conversation with the three girls ended. She went back to her text book, and the three, who were now standing around as if to circle her were having their own conversation. They talked back and forth loudly about class assignments, totally unaware that the girl was trying to study. She had no room to move out of their way, nor did they have the decency of moving some place else to leave her alone.

Finally when it was safe enough to enter the classroom, the three girls quickly pushed their way through the classroom door to claim their seats as if trying to beat the girl to it.

Word of the Week: word #4

1. The word: Impediments
2. Where I read it: Art History assignment webpage
3. The sentence I found it in: The year is 1857. How do you get to school and what impediments do you encounter?
4. Dictionary definition: obstruction; hindrance; obstacle.
5. New sentence: Since this was a take home assignment, there were many impediments on his concentration as he tried to finish the essay as fast as possible.

Word of the week: word #3

1. The word: Simulacrum
2. Where I read it: The End of Mr. Y by Scarlette Thomas
3. The sentence I found it in: Then the whole system becomes weightless, it is no longer itself anything but a gigantic simulacrum -- not unreal,but a simulacrm, that is to say never exchanged for the real, but exchanged for itself in an uninterrupted circuit without reference or circumference.
4. Dictionary definition: an effigy, image, or representation
5. New sentence: Mary's painting could be seen as a simulacrum of her surpressed anger.

Comparing Media

For this assignment I choose the coverage of the murder of the Yale graduate, Annie Le on September 18th.

On NBC's Today show the coverage was approximately three minutes. With five sources, a email, public statements and a interview with a NY daily news reporter. It seemed that compare to the newspaper and online news source, the segment relied on visuals with images of the email and cuts from the Police Chief's statement, and the Yale Universiy President's speech. It gave out details about Clark's personality and seemed abit rushed and not together due to the video cuts.

In the New York Time's coverage the article seemed abit long. There was the picture of Annie Le, an image of the arrest of Clark, and police chief Lewis. Their sources were similar to NBC's but an email was not mentioned and instead they had a reference on Clark's personality from a representative from the union of the technicians at Yale. The major source was the Police chief. This article seemed more detailed in the crime scene and the complexity of why they could not investigate quicker.

In the Stamford Advocate's online news article, the main source is Chief Lewis' news conference. There are even references to other news coverages such as NBC's Today show. It explained the process of investigating the evidence and recounting the whole situation from the beginning. I think this is more like the news paper article rather than the TV coverage.

Word of the Week: Word #2 (?)

1. The word: Aberration
2. Where I read it: Beautiful People by Mitsukazu Mihara
3. The sentence I found it in: Perhaps I didn't dispose of her because she was an aberration, like myself.
4. Dictionary definition: the act of deviating from the ordinary, usual, or normal type.
5. New sentence: Because of the way she dressed the others thought of her as an aberration and steered clear of her whenever she was around.

My Favorite Writing

I believe that through lyrics, you can truly express what it is you want to say. The words are short and straight to the point, if not alluding towards the message in unique ways. Mood could be easily set by how each phrase come out with the aide of melodies and beats. A good example is the first verses of the English version of a song titled “Map the Soul” from the 6th album (also titled Map the Soul) of South Korean, Hip Hop group Epik High.


“I remember my first glimpse of a face,
I saw you smile,
Then I smiled I was straight blown away,
Mesmerized by your beauty from your feet to your hands,
How can one be so beautiful I don’t understand,
Heaven sent, God’s gift without a doubt in my mind,
Sometimes I wonder why our paths decided to collide,
We started out as perfect strangers,
Boy meets girl,
From infatuation to love,
You’re my whole entire world,
Destiny, taps me on the back say'in, hello
But really it was your touch,
Know'in that I’d never let you go,
Then you spoke, I never heard a voice so sweet,
Heavenly and from her words, man, I knew, this girl was deep just like me,
When times to worry, and times to pray we’ll sit and stress over life or just burn the day away,
I know fo’sho, when in our past lives, we had to be friends liv’in and dy’in together,
know’in that we’d meet again, It’s just a bless’in, to have you in my life,
I was destined to be with you a privilege to amazing no questions,
And I’m know’in soon enough we’ll get where we’re go’in,
Just thinking about it, I can feel my heart growin,
And am I tripp’in or is it that I finally see,
I don’t know, but my heart is saying that the one for me, please believe me,
I’m exactly where I want to be, this rhyme is written from my heart to you,
Sincerely…”
Epik High -Map the Soul (Worldwide Version) feat. MYK & Kero One


When I first heard the beginning lines of MYK’s rap, I was instantly caught, forgetting the thought of pressing the next button of my music player. Just in those few words, the lyrics were able to call my attention, wondering what words would come next. In just a few words less than a whole short fiction piece I was able to learn that this man fell in love at first sight with a woman and has found the one. But these weren’t simple words such as “I met a girl, it was love at first sight, and we’ll be together forever”; they were deeper, showing how passionate he was towards the woman. The words give off a majestic feeling, setting a romantic mood – as he calls it, destiny – but at the same time points out reality. These are words that are sincere; phrases that aren’t easily thought up just to serve the point of rhyming or going along with the beat.